68. After the Colonial periods 50 percent mortality rate, life expectancy improved for children, but as late as the nineteenth century about one child in three died before reaching the age of six.
(A) After the Colonial periods 50 percent mortality rate, life expectancy improved for children, but
(B) Even though childrens life expectancy, which improved over the Colonial periods 50 percent mortality rate,
(C) Although life expectancy for children improved after the Colonial period, during which the mortality rate was 50 percent,
(D) While there was an improvement in life expectancy for children after the 50 percent mortality rate of the Colonial period, still
(E) Despite childrens life expectancy improvement from the Colonial periods 50 percent mortality rate,
Solution:
Modifier + Redundancy
A can be eliminated for the awkward usage of Colonial periods 50 percent mortality rate
B is wrong as removing the text between two commas fails to yield a complete sentence.
D is awkward due to the use of while there was.
E is indirect and awkward.
C is the best choice.
Sentence Correction - 1000 Questions with Solution:
(A) After the Colonial periods 50 percent mortality rate, life expectancy improved for children, but
(B) Even though childrens life expectancy, which improved over the Colonial periods 50 percent mortality rate,
(C) Although life expectancy for children improved after the Colonial period, during which the mortality rate was 50 percent,
(D) While there was an improvement in life expectancy for children after the 50 percent mortality rate of the Colonial period, still
(E) Despite childrens life expectancy improvement from the Colonial periods 50 percent mortality rate,
Solution:
Modifier + Redundancy
A can be eliminated for the awkward usage of Colonial periods 50 percent mortality rate
B is wrong as removing the text between two commas fails to yield a complete sentence.
D is awkward due to the use of while there was.
E is indirect and awkward.
C is the best choice.
Sentence Correction - 1000 Questions with Solution: